The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
However, during this 25-year period the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least-popular food, consumption levels were the most stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
译文
该图描述了1979-2004年期间,某欧洲国家居民牛肉、羊肉、鸡肉以及鱼肉的人均消耗量的变化情况。
1979年,比较而言,牛肉最受欢饮,其人均周消耗量约为225克。羊肉和鸡肉的人均周消耗量大致相等,约为150克。而鱼类食品消耗量则少得多,仅仅只有50克多一点。
然而,在过去的25年间,牛肉和羊肉的消耗量急剧下降,分别降至100克和55克。尽管鱼肉的消耗量也有所下降,但下降幅度甚小,只是略低于50克。因此,尽管鱼肉依旧不受人青睐,其消耗水平却是最为平稳的。
另一方面,鸡肉的消耗量出现了增长趋势,在1980年超过了羊肉的消耗量,继而又在1989年赶超牛肉的消耗量。到2004年为止,鸡肉的人均周消耗量已达250克。
总的来说,该图表明在此期间,鸡肉的消耗量大大增加,而其余三种肉类的受欢迎程度则有所下降。
分析
结构布局
第一段:(引言段)改写题目,通过同义词和信息的具体化,点出图表的主题。
第二段:(主体段落一)采用横向比较的写法,在起点时间分别对几种不同的肉类进行描述,并且比较了它们的最小值和最大值。
第三段:(主体段落二)将余下的时间作为一个时间段进行描述,描述下降趋势相同的两条直至终点时间,然后再把趋势相近的那条进行描述和比较,并指出其最小值。
第四段:(主体段落三)描述比较趋势相反——上升的那条,并找出其中的交叉点,以及其何时成为最大值。
第五段:(结尾段)对图表总趋势做一个比较总结。
连贯性
写作过程中,考官用到很多有效的连贯,例如句子之间的while,also,but,so等。段落之间的连贯尤为明显,如第三段的however,第四段的on the other hand和结尾的overall,使整篇文章连贯、清晰、自然。
语言质量
文中词汇表达非常清晰到位,如描述运动变化和变化程度的时候,也用到一些使用频率不高的词汇,如approximately,dramatically,soar,overtake等。同时,也注意词汇的变化,如“消费”分别用到了comsume,eat,consumption等词。